When I began to scrutinize my writing for words I could cut and still keep the story together, I was surprised! In the interest of keeping my stories lean and to the point, I found I could drop modifiers and make my sentences more professional.
Sometimes we want to add a word or two, seemingly to deepen the meaning of an act or some bit of dialogue. This is where many writers ruin their stories. For example:
She was so very ecstatic!
“So” and “very” are modifiers that needn’t be used in this sentence. The word ecstatic is the height of elation, the nth degree. The word needs no modifiers.
She was ecstatic!
Three little words that say exactly what I meant it to say without being verbose and taking up word space in the story that could be put to better use.
Another word is “just.”
– It was just that he wanted to go and she didn’t.
– The problem was that he wanted to go and she didn’t.
Drop the modifiers even if you must rewrite the sentence. Notice, too, that the corrected sentence doesn’t begin with “it,” which has no meaning when used this way. “It” has no meaning at the beginning of a sentence until we know what the sentence is about.
“It” can begin a sentence, usually inside a paragraph, when what is being referred to has already been mentioned.
Another example of dead words or overuse is the word “had.”
When writing in 3rd Person or past tense, it’s appropriate to use the word early in a paragraph. The rest of the paragraph should not contain the word “had.” Had sets up the paragraph in past tense. Only occasionally will there be no way around it and you must use it twice. Used early in the paragraph it sets up the tone of the action, even through subsequent paragraphs.
More dead words appear at the beginnings and ending of sentences.
-Where are you at?
-Where are you going to?
–That they could not have known, they took a chance anyway.
–They came running around the corner.
In some cases, your characters may speak like this, but sentences such as these should not be part of the narration. Unless we know to what or to whom these particular words refer before using them, they are out of place and make the subject of conversation obscure.
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